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[outlier_lynn]

Yoga Rocky.

Maximum flexibility while remaining calm. :) The playbill doesn't match the players, bu then....

I'm having a fine, fine life.

Anyone who wants to, may critique my professional Web site at Be the Change. Feed back on what works and what doesn't is welcome.

That shingle is out, by the way. If you are interested in coaching, let me know and we can set up an interview.

And, by the way, I love you.

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[pir-anha.livejournal.com]

i'd take out the paragraph about "what coaching is not". it gave me a small negative jolt right off the bat, instead of filling me with the goodness that coaching is supposed to be.

if you feel you need to say that (not sure why -- have you gotten a lot of inquiries where people expect you to be their mommy? :), then i'd put it last.

i wanted to say something else, but i didn't open the page in another tab, and now it's *whoosh* escaped my memory. maybe it'll come back later.

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[pir-anha.livejournal.com]

ok, i went back to it. i just looove to polish text, *grin*. too bad this isn't a wiki. i am so in love with wikis!

So what is coaching? It is primarily a partnership.

    i'd move the second sentence after the next one.

Coaching is a system by which a client examines his or her life in partnership with a trained observer.

    i think you should settle on either the more familiar "you" (which i think is preferable), or the more sterile "the client", but not mix them.

Coaching can provide you with the support necessary to create and fulfill on your dreams.

    there's a superfluous "on" in there, in front on "your dreams".

Coaching provides specific training and practices that assist you in determining the course of your life, developing a plan to fulfill on your dreams and to develop the skills necessary to remain in action regardless of changes in circumstances.

    another extra "on" in front of "your dreams". is "in action" supposed to refer to the developed plan?

Each coaching agreement, workshop and seminar is designed for each client. The appropriate program is crafted to provide the greatest value and the specific results desired by the client.

    yeah, i think i'd definitely go with the "you".

The key to success is to be coachable. The coach assists in developing a plan of action. It is up to the client to take the actions.

    it's not clear from this what it means to be "coachable", just that the client needs to take actions. i am not sure that i wouldn't leave that for another time, like your initial interview, unless you can be more positive here.

so, after reading all of this, i still don't really have a clue what coaching is. and i've heard you talk about it here a lot, and i don't really know what it means. ergo, a stranger coming to your website will be even more clueless. you might want to make a second page with an excerpt from a sample beginning coaching session. or just explain it here, and then see from how people respond how you need to word it. i mean, we're all familiar with sports coaches, but i personally don't have any good memories of that, and people in need of your services might also not be well disposed towards it. you need to create a more definite positive impression, i think, with more concrete examples beyond the rather vague "i'll help you fulfill your dreams", which sounds a wee bit snake-oilish all on its own.

hope this helps.